I'm sort of curious as to what the original plan was, but I thoroughly enjoyed that.

First off, I love the language used with this piece. The description paints a clear picture of the dark passion that seems to exist between them. It gives me this idea of sensuous beauty, dark and twisted. I really liked it when she threw her bottle of make up at him; it was like a breaking point in this tense atmosphere you created.

All in all, I really enjoyed this piece and I kind of what more. The dark beauty is just begging for a continuation; a deeper delving into the psyche of these two characters; revealing twisted minds and tainted hearts.

Thank you for sharing,

Rin-Ling

Have I mentioned that I love your descriptive writing?  It's so beautiful.  I enjoyed reading this story and hope to enjoy reading many more that you create ;)

Have I mentioned that I love your descriptive writing?  It's so beautiful.  I enjoyed reading this story and hope to enjoy reading many more that you create ;)

This was nice!

This story sounds interesting, keep it coming. 

Forked tongue?  Is he half snake?

I love that Kags had the last word lol. Gj

Forked-tongue? He sounds like a snake demon off the devil, ha ha ha.