Hello! I'm sorry it took so long for me to spare a time to read this.
This is a good start. I'm interested on what will you do next with Kagome being a hanyo. There's a bunch of fanfics here and there about her being hanyo or even yokai, and it's only a few that I consider good.
Anyway. I'm glad that you didn't write "Kagome's POV" or "Sesshomaru's POV" when you change the POV... sorry, it just gets on my nerves when someone do that *sighs*. I don't have a thing against first POV. It's kinda interesting, and sometimes hilarious to read an inner mind of my favorite character.
Aside from the mispelling--grammar is not my forte, so I'm not gonna comment if I find subtle ones--you do great for your first fanfic.
...now, to read the next...
that anger to happen now with kagome .the drama is complicated increasingly more
Loveyaa (Chapter 14) - Fri 02 Jan 2015
HI! Things just got more complicated. Though Kagome seems pretty firm in her stance and decisions regarding Sesshoumaru. And of course Naraku will use her hurt and anger ex to his advantage. Hopefully the couple will get a moments peace and rest. If you still need help with your chapters let me know. I can't wait to see what happens next :)
I like the dynamics of the story now that rynold's has shown up and is certainly up to know good. It is interesting the way you added the flash back to show us what had happened to Kagome. I look forward to the next chapter and have a sneaking guess at who approaches rynold is.
Great, keep it coming. Happy New Year!
tonya (Chapter 13) - Fri 28 Nov 2014
excellent!
Saiya (Chapter 13) - Fri 28 Nov 2014
Read all the chapters and LOVED Them. That Rynold is a Basterd.
Saiya (Chapter 1) - Fri 28 Nov 2014
Thats so Cute.
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