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Please update more it's a good story

Kinda messed up to leave it as a clify

I do not mean to offend with my following comment but it's constructive, I promise.

My first and only suggestion, is to sort out your summary. The summary is a small representation of what you are as an author. Therefore, it is taken as a prediction of your work, you need to change your spelling and grammar desperately, it seems that there is even missing words. I haven't read your chapter in all honesty as your summary says that i would be irritated by the problems you immediately say you have in your summary. Fix that and when you next pop up of the daily updates page, I'd happily read your first chapter.

All the best. :)

Your story has great potential but it is in need of editing. I was often times confused as i read. Even without a beta you could re-read each chapter a couple of times to see if you left out a word or words. The story would be easier to read if you put more spaces between each line.

good story, but you need to proof read or have a beta reader check for mistakes.

LOVE ! LOVE ! LOVE ! THE HISTORY IS BEAUTIFUL !!!! OTHER POST PLEASE !! : )