SpookiiPanda (Chapter 3) - Mon 19 Aug 2013

I like your story please update soon if you can ^.^ I haven't read much stories like this one... very good


mandy (Chapter 3) - Sun 18 Aug 2013

Holy Crow. I could see sesshomaru doing this, I felt like it was going to come to something of this nature. But holy crow, if you could have seen how red my face was when I read that part. I liked that Kagome was true to her servant nature, wish her thoughts were a little more rebellious, but I understand that she grew up in this enviroment. She's probably known it could happen to her at anytime. Great job! And Im so excited to see you updating so quickly. Thank you for the great read!


mandy (Chapter 2) - Sun 18 Aug 2013

Fantastic! This chapter was perfect, no awkwardness at all. I can't wait till this story updates. Poor Kagome.


mandy (Chapter 1) - Sun 18 Aug 2013

 

I love it! You have no idea how happy I am to see a second chapter. The main thing I noticed was an awkwardness in the way you worded somethings. This may just be due to your bluntness as a writer. It might help to describe things without actually naming them. Try imagining places, people, objects, and tiny details; then describe them instead of just saying they were there. All in all great job! I'm off to read chapter two now.


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