Nicely worded. Added quite a bit of feeling to it to.

O.O Wow. Talk about back stabing and then some.

Intensity!  I can't wait! I can barely breathe!

I'm still feeling the intensity. 

Bated breath.

Nonononon!

Intensity...

Yes! This is the best! Kill this guy Sessh!

ASK HER YOU IDIOT!!

ASK!!

i think im at a lost...why suddenly they are at a circus? o.O

Noooo! Hate this....!! And I love this.

Snap! Hate this guy!

Hate 

that guy!

Don't die Jaken!

uh, who's that bad guy???

I knew he was bad news!

Like, keep it coming.

This made me giggle. I love it! I'm so excited to know who this new guy is and I think you're doing an amazing job with Kogane! Good luck with Uni! I've got exams coming up myself, so I understand!

I don't trust him. He's probably evil.

Snap snap snap snap snap!

Mm!

I don't even know his nae and I'm drooling!

this story is amazing chapters are fascinating sorry my inglish is very  poor 

i really lisked the sory