For an opening, i like this story! ^^ keep it on *cheering*
I hope you continue writting the story. It is amazing, and Im extremly curious for tthe restof the story.
A very interezsting story. I am intrigued. Please continue.
Keep it coming.
please say that you didn't kill shippo and that he gets to come back to his mother soon! I can't wait to see what happens next!
Veve (Chapter 1) - Fri 21 Jun 2013
oh, and don't forget the comas.. ;D
Veve (Chapter 1) - Fri 21 Jun 2013
I think this story is good ^^ but I think it is better if you don't rush things in the story.. you should describe it slowly so the plot will be more natural and more interesting to read ^^ but overall, I love this story, keep up the good work!! ^^
Very good. Look forward to the next chapter. So far I like the writing style
This story sounds interesting, keep it coming.
I am intrigued by your new story. You have left open alot of possibilities and I can't wait to see where you go with it. I am hoping for longer chapters and frequent updates ( yes, I'm a greedy one when I see something with such potential, lol). I am anticipating your update. Keep up the wonderful work. =)
very interesting story. its very good. im wondering about kagomes eyes now. how'd they go from blue to black? cant wait for an update
It's a good start. I only question why, if Kagome protected Rin, why Sesshoumaru would say that Kagome would owe him for the rest of her life... wouldn't he be simply repaying the debt he owed her for caring for and protecting Rin, not to mention now teaching her and him sign language? Just wonder'n.
One chapter in and I'm already hooked! Your writing style flows very smoothly. The only critizism this lowly reader has to offer is, work on your comma placement. (:
Kachina (Chapter 1) - Fri 14 Jun 2013
Letith this continue. I hope soon.
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