I general I find this to be a good showing. A few issues about spelling. I believe in some instances you meant to type "yoki" instead of "youkai."
I don't really feel that referring to primal instincts as Sesshoumaru's "beast" is the way to go. It is reminiscent of a split personality which just doesn't fit well with Sesshoumaru (at least not in this story, perhaps there is one in which he is totally insane for all I know.)
I like the use of the work "youkai" instead of demon.
Jayne (Chapter 1) - Sun 12 May 2013
awww i loved this it was awesome i soooo cant wait to read more i hope you update again soon i really want this to continue for a bit i cant wait to see what to come up with :)
Kara (Chapter 1) - Sun 12 May 2013
I really liked this piece! Looking forward to the next ones!!!
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