This was great. I really liked your story idea and thought that you did well. In the future I would maybe make this a little longer, allow for slightly better flow. Like with your conclusion, you didn't address Kagome's wounds (making the reader wonder about her safety), etc. I say this just to help you; it's  something that I have had to work on (and still have to) a great deal in my papers and i generally think that the same thing can apply. I look forward to future stories, because this was good! Good Luck!