I don't get it. How come in the begining she called him her best friend when she had only just met him. 'no time for bonding' When, you had said she is around 18 years old. She would have the smarts to understand that he might be a wild dog and even if she had an afinity for animals and nature she would understand that she could not keep him. And him just attacking the mother when he only just met seemed off. When the way you are writing about is is as if she were 12 years old or younger.
Don't get me wrong, it is a good storyline.
It just also feels like your skipping several chapters of them getting to know eachother in that form. I don't feel a connection between the two. Like one moment he doesn't have a connection, then the next he does without the actual jurney that creates that bond. The connection between your readers and the main characters are nearly nonexsistant.
I hope I am not disuading you from it. You have a great potential starting off. I guess you just have to find your discriptive (pov) point of view and jurney. You can do it!
Michelle (Chapter 100) - Fri 23 Dec 2016
I need more!!!!!! Lol but u live this story can't wait for your next update!
Didie (Chapter 100) - Fri 16 Dec 2016
Oh dear.. I just hope Kagome is just as herself.. A human and a miko.. nothing more, nothing less..
But.. well... I'll stay reading
Just enough to make us want more! I love this story too! More twists and turns than The Road to Hana. Nice long chapter though. Thanks so much for the update!
InuYasha maybe, or perhaps just his mother at this point? Nice update!
*on hands and knees begging* please please keep writing! I love this story!
Wow! Wonderful update! Love the twists in this one. Thanks so much for the new chapter.
Ashatan (Chapter 99) - Sun 20 Nov 2016
Wow! I was not expecting that twist! Kagome is an Inu-hanyao! Can hardly wait for the next chapter!
Fantastic! I can't wait to read more!
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