I read the chapter yesterday before I went to sleep but I was so sleepy, it would have been impossible for me to give a detailed review.
You see, I don't believe for a second that Myobu is the mastermind behind the murders and conflict. He's too much of a coward. Now, he does have bad intentions, but I think there is someone else pulling the strings here.
I mean, who was talking to Inari with the snake-like speach? Definitely not Myobu.
Something tells me it's Kiyohime. Firsssssst, she reveals to Sesshoumaru that Bozu is Myobu --to distract him. And then, she'll do something... evil.
Or maybe an unknown character you haven't presented to us yet.
If it's really Myobu the sole criminal here, I'm gonna be so disappointed. Hehehe. It's a little too cheesy for your writing style. It would be like cooking up a master meal and then serving it in paper plates. :P
On another note... As I've said before, your writing style is amazing. The characterization is very well written. The descriptions and the setting is thoroughly thought out, which makes the story even more appealing to the common reader. Just the fact that you drew out a map to keep tabs on what is happening makes you a fantastic writer. Also, the flow and continuity of the story is beautiful. There isn't a thing that is out of place or bizarre in the context of the story (not that I've noticed so far). Every word and every gesture falls into the character perfectly.
The most impactful thing in your writing is how you were able to describe how Kagome went from being a human to being a youkai, and how she had to deal with that. It's really hard for a writer to convey the right thing when a character changes that much. Oh! And let us not forget about how Sesshoumaru and Kagome fell in love just like two puzzle pieces that were meant for each other. (Although, I do crave a little romance).
Kudos for everything. You're an amazing writer, as I've said before. And even though this is fanfiction, it's a wonderful story, and it's definitely worth reading.
Keep updating!! <3
xoxo
"I just smashed the words for 'weasel' and 'dragon' together." Oh, that made me laugh!
Absolutely marvelous two chapters! You really do deserve that award! Fantastic writing, well-planned and dramatic! I did guess that it was Myobu, but the way in which you excecuted the reveal was masterful, so it felt like a revelation.
Thank you for writing this story, it is brilliant. I shall EAGERLY be awaiting your next update :)
Ceysna (Chapter 42) - Wed 22 May 2013
This fic... I'm at a loss for words. You have one heck of a great story going here. I look forward to every update and am on the edge of my seat to see what you're going to do with the story next! And Congrats!
Looking forward to the next chap!!
momo1o1 (Chapter 42) - Tue 21 May 2013
im confused.. you keep mentioning years... just how much time has pass since naruku's defeat? and just how long now has kagome been with sesshomaru???
two chapter update. TWO!!! Have i told you lately how much i love you? really HAVE I ??!?! because i totally completly LOVE YOU
such a good chapter! Thanks for writing!
Those two chapters were great! I'm so bugged that Kagome hasn't said anything about her wound, but at least now that they know about Myobu his plan won't go as...well...planned. I can't wait for more. Please update again soon. =)
silly dragon fox, Sesshomaru will reind you dead.
Both chapters are great, keep it coming.
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