This is a wonderful story. I hope that you continue to be inspired to write it.
This is quite a fascinating story. I love the whole concept but I will say I have skip and skimmed over paragraphs because of the amount of detail. The details I have skimmed over are normally the information between characters having a conversation because there was to much wording between the characters speaking to really follow along. It is a little rough around the edges to know who is talking sometimes and if they are dragons or not. But that will be easier with time and more chapters posted. I feel however, that Kagome in the story feels more like a child then that of a 15 year old. It is hard to say much of Kagome's character development when there has not been much about her after she ran into the forest. Even before the forest, your kagome as of up to this chapter does not seem like a main character. I would love to read more about the black queen and Kagome bond more to help readers connect with Kagome better.
This is only my opinion and or preference in the form of a critique. To round it out, your story is quite unique and I would love to read on, the tension in the story feels like it’s building up and can’t wait to see what you have planned. Good luck and keep up the good work.
Both chapters are great, please update the next chapter quickly!
Ooo this was a really neat chapter. I love genetics - so much fun!
cant wait for the next posting!!
Ooooo the plot thickens!!! I can't wait to see where this goes. Gahh I'm absolutely loving this story!
All six chapters are nice, please update the next chapter quickly!
wow! what a story! please update soon. I can't wait to read more.
I'm so very excited to see more chapters!! YAY! ..and not just one, but three!
I really love the depth of the world you've created. Sometimes AU is difficult to read because there isn't enough history/culture built into the story to pull the world into focus, but you're doing that! I also love how there is always another angle, another reveal, another mystery to uncover. I'm excited to read more and see where you take Kagome, Mephisto, and Sesshomaru!
Thank you for updating, and I look forward to more!
KouseiJL
Dude.
This story is fucking amazing.
I mean Oh my GAWD
IT'S AMAZING
I will be quite honest with you - you could easily turn this into a novel and become VERY popular. Just change the names of Kags and Sess and BOOM AUTHOR!!
I ADORE this story and NEED ANOTHER CHAPTER OR 50!!! :-P
Toni (Chapter 12) - Wed 13 Jun 2018
this is go great can't wait for more
Please update this soon! I'm hooked!
I know you are building up the story but you haven't talked about Kagome for a very long time. I am enjoying what you have written but hope you bring her more into further chapters. She is the reason why I am reading and would like to know about what she is up to.
KageRyo (Chapter 9) - Sat 05 Dec 2015
This is an awesome story. I can honestly say that I can not wait to be able to read more of it soon.
KageRyo (Chapter 9) - Sat 05 Dec 2015
This is an awesome story. I can honestly say that I can not wait to be able to read more of it soon.
Michela (Chapter 8) - Wed 10 Dec 2014
I am in love with this story! I can't wait to read more about where Kagome ended up going with that other rider and it couldn't hurt to read more Sess x3
Hope you update soon =D
I'm really happy that your continuing this story. I was starting to worry that you won't continue writing. I love this story. It's one of my favorites. I hope to read more soon. ^_^
I love this story. I hope your still going to continue wroting it. Hope to read more soon.
Where have you been? It's been eight months since you last updated. I'm glad your back, great chapter. Please update the next chapters soon and not in months, keep it coming.
please update soon please
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