This story sounds interesting, keep it coming.

Oh, I just found this today! I really hope you continue this story; -grins- Putting Koga in the mix was a good idea. lol How Kagome got on the defensive and what not also. Kindness can go a long way, ne?

Thanks again for writing and I'll be waiting for a new one!

I like that the plot is different than a lot of the stories currently being posted.  I am looking foward to your updates!^^

Poor Kagome, losing her family. Good story.

I usually don't like high school stories, but this caught my interest. I like the twist on the theme.

This story is getting good and the writing is improving with each chapter keep it up.

I think you are doing good.  I see someone already mention the spacing for when people are talking to one another and as to the speed it all depends.  If the next chapter is Sessh in love with Kags then yes to fast.  But I'm not sure what happens next to determine that.  So far overall I like it and look forward to the next chapter.

Seems promising, you might want to change the Universe to Alternate thou since its definately not Canon.

update soon pleasee ^^

Love it! I look forward to seeing what happens next!

MUCH better! Great job!

-Forgotten!

I like it overall, I do have a slight correction though you have replay instead of reply in at least 2 places, replay is like to play a segment of film, etc more than once, the word you wanted was reply which is to say something in response to something someone has said. Also a comment, the talking sections are a bit hard to figure out all in 1 paragraph like they are, talking is usually line spaced by person talking, like this for example;

“Kagome…”

“Yes Inuyasha?”

“Thanks for helping me home.” They were both walking on the sidewalk but Inuyasha’s body was leaning against Kagome’s for support, his arm was also around her shoulders.

You tell him Kagome. I like this..... Keep it up.

-TheNight-

I like where this story is going and would like to see what happens next, but I have a few tips for you. One) Get a beta. (Two) I see this happen a lot of different stories, don't bunch everthing together. Sperate dialog, meaning don't do this: "Kagome speaking" "Sesshomaru speaking". It gets very confusing because if you have more than just one person speaking at the same time and if it goes unmarked, like you have it, you can't really tell whose saying what.  Skip lines and say who is talking - put their movements to them. (Three) Another thing I see a lot happen, especially when you bunch dialog together, is that you try to bunch everything into big paragraphs. The perfect example of the last two things is in the last chapter when she was fighting the demon. (Four) Also, you're rushing things like your running a marathon. Slow down and take your time. Put more details - you can never have enough details. You don't have to descirbe every little thing - like every outfit you put them in or stuff like that - but put enough so it doesn't seemed rushed.

I'm not trying to be mean or anything when I say these things, I'm just trying to help you improve.

-Forgotten!