Wow! Great start! You definitely have my attention. I like that there is immediately going to be a power struggle between Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru. I can’t wait to find out what happened to cause the girl to be covered in blood. Wonderful start to your first story.
" Sango handed her a bottle of Carbon dioxide to kill any kind of infections and gauze to wrap around her stomach." In this sentence I think you mean hydrogen peroxide?
A really good beginning with simple introductions to each character and a bit of their personalities.
I was a little confused as to who said "We shall stop here," because it was followed by "The Demon Slayer Sango..."
Also, I think you meant Hydrogen Peroxide for cleaning wounds ^-^.
Again, a really good start and I'm curious who this new hanyou is, what she is and how she figures into this story.
Hello Angel or Lillian, I must say you have a great start. The first chapter described the new set up and changes to the group. I would like to know, maybe, how Sesshomaru was convinced to join the Inuyasha group. But anyways, the first chapter definitely caught my attention! *throws sprinkles of encouragement*
I love the introduction of this new character. She is hurt and a hanyou. Hmmm...will she be paired with Inuyasha? She brings a lot of mystery and potential to this plot/story.
Keep up the wonderful work. I found that you kept true to the characters of the Inuyasha group. Well done!
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