This is a very hard story to read. 1st chapter and for most of it there's no way to tell who's speaking. There's talking and it's good it's broken by spaces, but don't know whose talking to who unless the chacters name is in it, but even then don't know who's speaking. Hard to tell how many people are around, what's happening around them, are they in a park, house. There's just not a lot of detail
Aviator (Chapter 2) - Sat 07 Jul 2012
Soooo depressing, but absolutely amazing!!!
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