While constructive criticism and other writer's/reader's, etc., opinions should always be welcome and treasured for the gifts they are, the story is ultimately yours. Take all of that, consider it, use it or dismiss it as you see fit, and forge ahead. You have the vision only you can unfold before us. We know where we think you are going and how the characters will change as they react to the events happening to them; but, only you can truly know. How you see your characters, and remaining true to the perspective you are writing from, should remain one of your strongest guiding forces. Please keep telling your story exactly as you are. I'm enjoying it.
Another five great chapters, keep it coming.
Another five great chapters, keep it coming.
I find the story some what cute. I have a problem with Kagome, with so many tramatic experiences, naivity would have been lost a long time ago. She would have HAD to grown to survive, for there was no time to run and hide. All her girlish view would have been crushed long ago. Trial by fire in a sense. Being practical would have been a must. Especially in this time era. It was very harsh and unforgiving. She would have seen and heard things that would make most of us look for some serious professional help. Remeber this is the Waring states, many were of the peasent class living short harsh lives, full of ignorance and superition. For a female of the future it would have been a serious culture shock. Plus all this time she is growing older, wiser and complex.
I think this story is going in a good direction, i can't wait till you update again
WOW! You are on a roll with the updates...I like! It is of my opinion that you are headed in the right direction with this story. Great job! :)
Wow. He actually replied.
Thanks for writing.
All five chapters are great, keep it coming.
I have not reviewed any stories in a couple of years. You are my first and I think you are off to a good start. I hope to see more of your work soon and I like the direction that this story is headed...keep up the good work.
Great story, please update soon.
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