Reviews for New Beginning by flutiegirl

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LadySafire (Chapter 1) - Thu 07 Aug 2008
Please continue!

lovesbooks16 (Chapter 1) - Thu 07 Aug 2008
My one complaint is that the text goes off the page and I feel as if I'm missing something. I would like to see where you are going with this. Please continue.

(Chapter 1) - Thu 07 Aug 2008
yeah i'm sorry about the text. i tried fixing it but gave up for the night. i was going to work on it a bit tonight be the site isn't letting me. thank you very much for your encouragment!

Ethereal Siren (Chapter 1) - Wed 06 Aug 2008
The writing goes off the end of the page... I was able to read it from the printable version and it's a good start. My personal preference is to not have a lot of details and descriptions of peoples homes and clothes. Unless they are somehow important to the plot, a lot of people don't care to have a full tour of a room with full descriptions of the decor. Personally I love details, but after reading about 200 different versions of what Kagome is wearing now instead of the sailor fuku, it gets kinda old. I'm curious to see what you will write on this story next and what the deal is with the paperwork Kagome has to deal with in the morning... I wonder if it has something to do with Sesshoumaru or if that is coming a bit later... by the way, I am glad that you had the battle scene in a dream instead of a flashback or the start of the story. I don't particularly like to be thrown into the final battle at the beginning of a story and a personal fan fiction pet peeve of mine is to have a flashback in the first chapter.... typically after within the first three paragraphs. Doing it as a dream.... or rather nightmare makes it flow better and keeps me form rolling my eyes and loosing interest. **hate flashbacks** so... I hope to see that next chapter soon:)

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