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Pricila (Chapter 16) - Sat 04 Aug 2012

Great chapter!  I can't wait to find out who the target is and why.  Sessh to the rescue!


Selena (Chapter 16) - Sat 04 Aug 2012

Another great chapter!! =)) keep it up!


InuLuna of The Moon (Chapter 15) - Fri 03 Aug 2012

Of course I'll leave a review! It was worth reading and I liked it. Can't wait for another chapter ^-^ It's another reason why I didn't actually add a review to the prievious ones... lol couldn't stop


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 15) - Sat 21 Jul 2012

Keep it coming.


Selena (Chapter 14) - Sun 15 Jul 2012

oh, please! Sesshomaru save shippou, help kagome! do something!!!


Midnight (Chapter 14) - Thu 12 Jul 2012

What's going to heappen now? WIll Sesshoumaru save poor shippo? What about Kagome? I'm guessing that her dad was not happy with her. Than again. I don't think he ever is. Can't wait for the next chapter! ^_^


Chaos Ninja (Chapter 14) - Sat 07 Jul 2012

Wait! Why is she letting them take her away? And with how skilled a fighter she's been so far, how are they able to over power her? Who are these other wolves? I must know what happens next! :D


Chaos Ninja (Chapter 14) - Sat 07 Jul 2012

Wait! Why is she letting them take her away? And with how skilled a fighter she's been so far, how are they able to over power her? Who are these other wolves? I must know what happens next! :D


mydarkeyes55 (Chapter 14) - Sat 07 Jul 2012

I'm guessing the othwe wolves are her servants and guards coming back to get her, right? Nice chapter. Very interesting. Update soon! :D


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 14) - Sat 07 Jul 2012

Keep it coming.


Pricila (Chapter 14) - Sat 07 Jul 2012

I'm guessing the largest black wolf is her father and the lighter brown one is Miroku?  I can't wait to read the next chapter and see what happens and how Sessh will handle the fact that the warrior lady, Kags, was whipped by her father.


Chaos Ninja (Chapter 13) - Fri 06 Jul 2012

Noooooooo!!!!!!! You can't stop there!!! You're so mean! I have to know what happens! Please!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


mydarkeyes55 (Chapter 13) - Fri 06 Jul 2012

Your writing is so fresh and funny. I really like it. (: Keep up the good work.


Midnight (Chapter 13) - Thu 05 Jul 2012

Noooo! Poor cute sweet little Shippou.  Love the story ^_^


Anonymous (Chapter 13) - Thu 05 Jul 2012

Livi (Chapter 13) - Thu 05 Jul 2012

this was awesome! please write more


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 13) - Thu 05 Jul 2012

I'm glad you finally updated it's been weeks, poor Shippou. Keep it coming.


Houjin Shikaku (Chapter 1) - Mon 18 Jun 2012

Great job!! Reads much better but still has your voice behind it! 

It's much more detailed and the characters are fuller and more fleshed out.

I just went through and cleaned up the chapter. I tried to not restate suggestions but just fixed up some grammatical errors. 

Just a quick tutorial though, lol. I separated each specific correction into a section separated by ------------ that. If there are multiple errors that need the same corrections they will be in the same section, just located on a different line. The corrections for each section are notated with a *.





"wear magnificent pearls, splendid clothes, and pretty shoes."

*Delete Comma

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"What's frustrating is I have to be all of those people."

*Insert Comma

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It’s sad because people tend to ridicule half-breeds, they tend to loathe them so much.

*Repeated word

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he really hates half-breed

*breeds

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mate a powerful lord also he keeps telling me that I am 

*Insert period after "lord"; Capitalize "Also"

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She was a captive of a youkai and she was a priestess

they did it and I was conceived

*Insert Comma

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"Your sire will be so angry." Ah Chen mumbled

"I won't mate for his politics." I said, crossing my hands

 I'm just 16 years of age." I said childishly

mating age, my lady." She said in 

Alright." She said, a smile 

Heh." I laugh

*Change period into a comma

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Guards, Let us escort our Lady

*Uncapitalize

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Ah Chen!!!" I screams and run as fast as

*scream

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I hear butler Li shout.

*Capitalize


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 12) - Wed 13 Jun 2012

Keep it coming.


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 1) - Wed 13 Jun 2012

Keep it coming.


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