wow that had to take a long time to rewrite because that was soo good i loved the new chapter and i liked the way kagome answered it was soo cute i can't wait till koga tells every one about mateing kiki that should be fun to read

you're good at the characters, giving them each a situation and whatnot... but there isn't any conflict, you need some conflicts here and there, and usually there are understood situations on a large scale, like a war, or a crisis, or a threat to everyone in general... **shrug** idk, conflicts just make things interesting

i love it you have to write more soon

i like it. its a great beginning.