Wow...I'm not to sure what else I can say.
This story really got my blood going. I rarely fine many fics anymore that actually have the level of creativeness/writting that yours does.
I am very happy with this fic so far and cannot wait to read more that you come up with.
Its great that you have Kagome as cunning and bright, it makes the fic seem more real that she stands up to what she believes is right and not just letting things happen around her. I highly dislike all the fics to where she is pretty much a blundering idiot that only screams and wines all the time. I love when she has more of a realistic personality.
I know the whole "youkai slave" theme has been used before but I am greatful that you have twisted it to put your own take on it.
I truly look forward to your next update, keep up the excelent work.
-Kira
I really love this story, I can't wait for the next chapter and can't wait for some Kagome-Sesshomaru interaction!
Hanatsuki (Chapter 6) - Mon 19 Mar 2012
Beautiful, a nice take on the youkai enslaved plot. I adore the characters, and the addition of more members to Sesshomaru's family! I look forward to the next chapter!
I am loving this! more pleaase!!!
Interesting plot, but you need a beta. There are grammatical errors and incorrect word used. Don’t stop writing, you can only get better. Good luck!!
Beautifully sweet. I love how Sesshomaru picked up right away that Naraku was a bad seed. I am NOT looking forward to the spider's new plot. Not that anything he can say to Kagome's father will succeed in separating Kagome and Sesshomaru I suspect. Not with the way they're souls seem to be connected nor with the way she set his slave collar.
Thanks for writing!
I LOOOOVVEEE this story!! OMG I can't wait for the next chapter. Evil Naraku will eventually die by Sesshoumaru.. lol I can only hope!! -Cef
Heyya.. Actually, I haven't been on for a very long while and kinda miss this place where I can let my imagination run wild. You have a very interesting and lovely plot going on for you. LOVE THE STORY, BTW!! Hurry and continue. You have fire up my partially dead brain, my dear, and to stay dormant for too long might as well be my version of apocalypse. However, keep in mind that a dictionary at hand is always a great company when one is sceptical about ones own spelling and use of words. It may sound the same, however the spelling gave off different meaning and can easily confuse others. As well, shorter lines are much easier on the eyes. Observe other writers... I learned this the hard way. It will be a waste if such a great story is hard on the eye. Especially one such as I who is near/long sighted. However, keep on writing as your heart desires. You have a wonderful imagination. Love your story from the bottom of mine heart..
Trice (Chapter 5) - Fri 09 Mar 2012
I am really am glad that you continued this story and did not go by the number reviews you receive. Your story is unique and comes from a different angle of the slave and master. I am enjoying how you are intermixing your own characters with the ones we are familiar with I find myself really in grossed in your story and cannot wait until the next chapter is loaded. You truly have a gift in writing because you really capture me with your words and I can invision the scenes as I read your story. I look forward to reading and seeing how the story unfolds.
I LOVE IT! Please update soon! <3
Rose (Chapter 1) - Fri 09 Mar 2012
Alright I am going to start out by saying this. I never write reviews on any stories what so ever. You have earned a great honor. I don't remember the last time i wrote a review on anyones stories and believe me that is a lot of stories. I am surprised with the lack of reviews on this story. It is so good. With each chapter that y ou have written it had kept me with in an inch of loosing chair because i kept creeping closer to my computer wanting to make sure I never once missed a word. You keep your reader on edge throughout each chapter and that is a very hard feat to accomplish. I congradulate you! This story is very good and I am excited for the next chapter in hopes that sesshomaru rips narakus head off his shoulders. of course not next chapter but sometime in the future. Awaiting the next chapter!!!!!!
I'm Way past when I should be asleep so please forgive me if there are parts of this review that make little to no sense but after reading this chapter I couldn't NOT review! I could hardly wait either!
Although painful... the vivid imagery given to the extent of Sesshomaru's damages was awesome. You didn't have to describe each lasceration to show how really bad off he was with how long it was taking them to heal him and the continual changings and clensings. It really emphasized how strong Sesshomaru's youki was upon its release when he healed himself.
Speaking of which... Booyaka! Kagome has the most utterly loyal of guard dogs now! :happy dances: THAT'LL throw a monkey-wrench in Naraku's plans For Sure! I'm totally stoked!
I just hope it's not Kouga at the door and that if it IS... Sesshomaru doesn't take him out in his protection of Kagome.
Oh... and I'm totally loving their souls calling to each other. I hope to see more of that significance.
...and now... I crash. So tired. ^_^
Thanks so much for writing!
helikesitheymikey! (Chapter 4) - Wed 07 Mar 2012
I'm a wee bit worried about her condition of if she dies her closest kin gets the slave...first of all what's to stop her dad from killing her to get the slaves if he finds out about it? and who's her closest kin? would it be her brother or could one or both of her parents try to get the slaves? or they might try to manipulate her brother with having the slaves do what they*her parents* want...
SO...Shippo is a lil motormouth...I hope he didn't say too much info about it in case bad humans might try to find the freed slaves so that they can capture them and sell them or something...I hope Kagome sets up some kind of barrier around her property so that other mikos and monks who would hurt her friends won't be allowed in...sutras and other enchanted objects that would be used for bad too would be good to use a barries to keep out.
interesting story...wonder what Sesshomaru will think when he comes to...and when they get back to the cottage. SO...Kagome has a denmother or something at her cottage to care for the little ones? are there any other child youkai/hanyou on her property or will she start trying to get more kids to help her?
SO...since Naraku doesn't know about Shippo and Azure Kagome can free them but she can't free Sesshomaru or the female currently right?
Fascinating story so far. I love how you're bringing all the characters together -both canon and original.
I look forward to seeing how Sesshomaru will react upon meeting Kagome. Thankfully your Kagome is strong enough to be able to control him for the time it will likely take to calm him down enough to Listen. That is if he is not aware/awake to get some sense of it himself as she sees to it that he heals.
I shall have to re-read to check whether the Red she bought was one of the pups for whom Sesshomaru bartered. Their names mostly slipped to the wayside other than Azure's once I read them.
I DO wish you would go through your story for better spelling and grammar. Particularly mixed words: there/their/they're, your/you're, but especially using "holly" where "HOLY" should be. That last makes it very difficult, for me, to fully immerse within the story. Rather... it's much like hitting an invisible barrier while driving down the road: a jolt that makes one blink then readjust. Working on such things would greatly improve the story's quality.
Thanks for writing!
Koi (Chapter 1) - Tue 06 Mar 2012
Niiice! I would love it of you could please continue this story. I love the way this story isstarting off. Pure Kagome meets the tainted Sesshomaru. Mmmmm this is gonna be a goooood story. Ppllllease continue this story for me!^-^
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