oohh...very interesting. can't wait for more

Interesting start. I like where it's going. Please update soon:)

a good start and can not wait for more of the story and see where you go with it. good plot to .

I love thé idée si far. I hope to read more soin.

ohohoh! is it Fluffy!? if not Fluffy I wonder who it could possibly be.... I hope your eyes don't get too poked out by the tooth*eye* picks.... PLEASE UPDATE AS SOON AS YOU CAN!

very interesting. you have some issues with grammar and punctuation but overall it's very well done. i would suggest you send your work through a beta reader to help on those issues. otherwise, it's a good story, better than many out there. i can hardly wait for more.