Sessylove219 (Chapter 1) - Thu 11 Feb 2010

Well, doesn't that suck? You get to come back, but not have your memories? I feel bad for Kags and Sessy. I am going to have to read the first part of this story to understand the whole thing, I am sure. It seems fitting that Kagome would be a 'Mistress of Time' because like it says in the second movie, time moves different around her. Anyways, I hope you continue on, this looks really good!


beckyducky (Chapter 1) - Mon 08 Feb 2010

Chapter One:
Great concept! I liked the spin you put on the well and Kagome's ability to travel through time.  It reminds me of this other fic i read which described Kagome as a time lord and her father was as well...what was it.... OH! Facets of the Living Jewel.  I like how it starts off with mystery, and it leaves the reader wanting more...

Chapter Two:
Oh No!! Kagome lost her memories!! Well, all will be well soon... i hope!! >.< At least she recognizes him.  I'm happy that you made sesshoumaru and inuyasha reconcile their differences (i am assuming it's canon). 

Chapter Three:
How can everyone still be alive after centuries?  I understand rin-rin (i'm guessing she's with shippo) but as for sango and miroku - I'm confused.  Well, I guess I'll find out later!

Overall notes:
Your story flowed really well and there were no awkward spots for me.  I'm in love with this fic and i do hope you update soon!

ducky out!


sesshys_jaded_samuri (Chapter 3) - Sun 07 Feb 2010

All in all, I found that the entire story thus far felt very rushed.  Take your time and think things out, your story will be better for it.  I'm not sure if it will help you, but it might be a good idea to make a rough outline of where you wish to go with your story - it might make it easier to get there and it might help give you a little more structure.  I am not saying that your story is bad, or anything.  Actually, I would like to read more.


Hairann (Chapter 3) - Sun 07 Feb 2010

Try to slow down your pacing a bit as the story is sounding rather rushed.  For the most part you are going alright with the details, but there are some parts that have too many one liners in a row and can cause the flow to be interupted, so try to watch out for that.  A few grammar issues, but for the most part it seems that your beta is doing a great job.


Angelicatt (Chapter 3) - Sun 07 Feb 2010

Ok Ok..1st chapter threw me a lil cuz of the summary from the last story. She died but from what? How long was she mated to Sess? How are all the humans still alive 250 yrs later? Yasha and Sess are on speaking terms and he's living at the castle??

Your beta did a great job of catching most of the booboos...there are still a couple more but the story read quite well after Kagome reawoke at the castle. I am eager to see what happens when they look in the coffin. You should definitely continue on with this tale...I know I am anxious to learn more


Ikaru (Chapter 3) - Fri 05 Feb 2010

i am enjoying your story, but i wish there was a little more detail involved in some of the places, there were also some grammar issues, but nothing too severe, i really wanna see where you are going to take this story, i will be awaiting the next chapter eagerly!!

Ikaru


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