Keep it coming.
I found i liked this chapter alot. There is nothing and i repeat NOTHING sexier than a confused and annoyed Sesshoumaru. Of course, according to the name of this story, there will be smut in this yes, yes?! Oh of course there is. I shall be stalking this story miss lady.
Keep it coming.
And... I just read this all in one go and didn't comment till I reach the end... realizing this, my one comment for the chapter was pretty pathetic soooo...
I really like this fic.. too. Now I'm hooked on two of your fics. Really interesting idea. Can't wait till he remember the rest of them. Why can't Kagome know she is pregant? and yay for Kikyou getting what was coming to her. I smiled gleefully when I read she was bound and gagged and flung over his shoulder. lol. Keep up the good work. :D
aw.... Glad he remembered Shippou.
joyouki (Chapter 3) - Fri 10 Feb 2012
OMG! That was complete juice! So very hot and passionate..
joyouki (Chapter 1) - Fri 10 Feb 2012
ooooh how I love this...juicy!
| I've read through a few of your fics now and I keep encountering the same things. You have a cute plot idea in all of them, but a wide array of grammar and spelling errors. The biggest and most glaring of the grammar issues is that you change POV so fast it makes your head spin. 1st person writing is something I know myself and many of my friends don't particularly enjoy when it comes to fiction writing. It's very much possible to express how individual characters think and feel without switching into a first person POV. The sections you write in third person are far more enjoyable. Also, you tend to have a lot of misspellings, including using the same misspellings dozens of times. For instance, "feint". When spelt "feint", it means to fake someone out. You hear it quit often in sports, for example. When you refer to someone losing consciousness, it's spelt "faint". I think you have potential, but I highly recommend recruiting an excellent beta to help you along as you learn and explore your writing style.
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