Well the plot is good, you have rather weird errors though since about half the time you use things correctly & then the other half they're goofed, like were/where & definitely/defiantly. Where/were examples; "Where" refers to a question about a place or location of something, such as: "Where is our table?" "Were" is the plural form of "was." For example:"I WAS at the concert last night. We WERE there all together with my friends." Definitely is a form of definite, you're sure about something, defiantly is along the lines of your mother wears army boots or so's your old man. You also have missing words here & there of the the, as, etc kind.
Hilarious! Sesshoumaru actually answered "Bird Watching" LMAO!! And Miroku got socked in the head by some kind of soap bottle, then stomped on by Kagome as she made her way over. I absolutely loved it and I'm hoping for more soon.
--Kaminoko
TKE (Chapter 1) - Wed 28 Dec 2011
OMG.....soooo busted....LMAO!!!
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