I like how all the characters are not OCC. You've captured their attitude in your writing with your detail. I love it!
I wonder how Sesshoumaru and Kagome will develope and evolve though out the story.
And is only Sesshoumaru in control of his feelings? It seems that Kagome doesn't realize that she is under a spell, so she wouldn't care what consequences her actions have.
Keep working hard! You are an amazing story teller. Your grammar and how you make the story flow with your words and details is simply marvelous. The more you write your story, the more it will develop into something truly entertaining.
Can't wait to read more!
Your writing is very detailed and flows nicely. It is easy to understand and fun to read. I like how the fox demon won Kagome over and gave her the necklace to wear later. What a smooth character you developed! I can't wait to read what happens next!
Interesting idea. I like the detailing of the kitsun demon. I can't wait to read what his plan is!
Cherry (Chapter 3) - Tue 27 Dec 2011
Interesting. I'll be waiting....
Venita (Chapter 3) - Tue 27 Dec 2011
Great, please update soon. Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!
Venita (Chapter 1) - Thu 22 Dec 2011
This story is interesting, please update soon. Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!
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