Keep up the great work. I can't wait to see the direction you take on this story.
ha that's kinda hilarious! But for the two or three sentences you used figure twice. This is probably a little too nit picky but when I read it, the repeated words kind of took away from the quality of the sentences. Try switching them up and they'll flow better and make them stand out
Crescent Maiden (Chapter 1) - Tue 22 Nov 2011
This is gonna be good. :)
asha (Chapter 2) - Tue 22 Nov 2011
its pretty good so far, not much i can comment on though. and i did see some spelling errors, but keep it up i really want to read more.
Sounds very intriguing so far! I'll look forward to the next chapter :D
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