I enjoyed reading your lovely story very much. It was just that little bit different from the usual Halloween type offerings and that made it more interesting to me. I like the way you write with such clear images, I could imagine every thing very well. Apart from your story just sparkling with such a good mixture of mild comedy, exciting turns of events and a very saucy, luscious lemon I am appreciative of your good grammar, logical flow of English and the fact you cared enough to run the spellchecker! Makes all the difference in the level of reading comfort. If I am not struggling with trying to decipher stuff it keeps me reading on and on.

I particularly loved these two phrases....

“I feel naked!” She whispered, her eyes wide. Sesshomaru chuckled. “I feel like a moron… so we’re even.”

Lol, made me chuckle too!   And....

"All the while his name trickled from her lips like a broken love song,......."

Mmmm, the soft eroticism of that line is just beautiful.

In short, your piece of writing was great !!!!1