Hai (Chapter 1) - Tue 31 May 2022

Oh it's such a beautiful story. Loved it.


Himura Asami (Chapter 1) - Tue 15 Oct 2013

I. LOVE. THIS.


KanadeBlossom (Chapter 1) - Mon 19 Aug 2013

This story is amazing! Why u no write more?!?! Seriously, I would LOVE it if you wrote more stories. You have a really really good writing style :)


The Lady W (Chapter 1) - Thu 20 Oct 2011

This is your first fanfic? The writing skill and clarity is even more remarkable then. Well done.

I will admit to being curious as to why Kagome is wearing a yukata and as to the location of the rest of their corresponding parties, but the information truly isn't necessary to enjoy this short fic.

Writing-wise, my only thought would be to remove the word "passionately" from the following sentence: "In the space of a heartbeat, his warm mouth was pressed passionately against hers." The affection comes naturally in the description afterward, so it isn't necessary to add the adverb at the beginning. But this is a minor tweak and personal opinion. Ignore as you deem fit.

Content-wise, I've never found the ground on a meadow to be warm when laying upon it. Soil tends to be cool and wick away body heat. I live at the nothern end of the plains states, so I feel fairly confident in my observation. But just because the ground is cool doesn't mean a person won't cook in the sun.

All in all though, wonderful job.


brainrabbit (Chapter 1) - Mon 17 Oct 2011

Love it so very much...wishing you could write chapters for it!


TKE (Chapter 1) - Sat 15 Oct 2011

AWWWW...so sweet!!! Great job!!!


Allyonora (Chapter 1) - Sat 15 Oct 2011

Yes, Kagome is right, he'll be impossible from now on!

=D

Great work, I loved it!


CookieAsylum (Chapter 1) - Fri 14 Oct 2011

Aw, so cute.
That was adorable. lol Smug Sesshoumaru at the end.
And Kagome was such a sweetie. I really liked this story. <3

- CA 


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