I like you story and it's worth it. I expecially laughed when Kagome was tossed into the lake like that. Well I hope to read more and thanks for writing!

Ah! I love it! This movie was so cute and to was excited to see the challenge on the forums! You definitely did a wonderful job!!! HEHE. I love the humor in this story. XP Thanks for letting me read such wonderful work!

~Smo

Nice start! I like they way you've inserted Kagome and Sesshomaru into the Dragon world--good job!

While I agree with your other reviewer in that I would've liked to see you deviate from the movie, I'm still interested to see how you'll incorporate my prompts!

Now, you should be sure to proof read before you post so that you can catch typos and the like, and the Purdue OWL is a wonderful resource for writers--I'll post the link to the site at the bottom of my review. Other than a few comma issues and some misplaced words/tense uses, you've written a very intriguiging beginning for those who haven't seen the movie. If you don't already, I suggest writing in Microsoft Word and/or reading aloud before you post.

Other than that, awesome job! Thanks for participating, and I look forward to your next entry!

~Aubrey

Purdue OWL: http://owl.english.purdue.edu/

^^ UPDATE SOON PLS!!

Lol ya have lil' problem with comas. Also, I hope u won't follow the movie's plot so...accurately otherwise itll get boring and predictable. Come on, surprise me!! ^^

Yeah, btw its a great story