I love how real this story feels and love how you have set it up. There is a nice build up that can go either good or bad for all those involved.
Hmmm. I like it. I want to read more, but I also see some things I had to ignore to enjoy it.
Sesshoumaru...He feels a little week in this. I'll give the benifit of a doubt and say it has to do with a) knowing Kagome so well, and b)the situation.....but I'm still not conviced it's quite right...his 'wife' is able to get away with too much, and I don't see how he could fall for her so fast, or manage to convince his family and himself of her being her trustworthy enough to leave the pre-nup out after only knowing her 5 months.....especially if his best friend is Kagome, and mika has so many issues with said best friend....
Also, where is Inuyasha? You've mentioned that his father, step mother, and adopted sister....but no brother yet.
But don't get me wrong! I wish there was more to the story! I'm looking forward to reading new chapters.
Married a golddigger and just can't see it. I wonder how she would react to the surrogate?
amy (Chapter 1) - Mon 05 Sep 2011
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