Booyaka! Shippou!

Thanks for writing.

Wicked start. I have a few suggestions though... Grammar makes a story better to read. It would also make the story more entertaining because the reader enjoys a story better when they don't have to decipher the writer's meaning.

Yes!!! Just came back from an unintentional dokuga reading hiatus! And I find just the type of adventure story I was looking for. Love the plot! It seems like you're going to develop the characters really well. Looking foward to reading more.