Okay - I like the concept so far, but i do recommend getting a beta as some parts were confusing because of the spelling/grammar mistakes.  I enjoyed the interaction between Kagome and Inuyasha but the one thing that had me scratching my head is how Kagome got Inuyasha to "sit" when there is no mention of the rosary beads.  Just curious - perhaps that will be explained in later chapters.  The plotline seems interesting and I can't wait to see some Kagome/sessh interaction. 

Just a note: instead of saying in an author's note how the leaders of east and west dont know each other's appearance, make that a chapter or a part of the chapter.  It's imperative that you explain the story within the story and not as an outside note.  This breaks from the flow.  Your fic is absolutely amazing and would be even better if you made some adjustments.  I wish you luck for future chapters! I hope you update!

ducky out!

This is a very engrossing story. I feel bad for Sessy, being haunted by dreams and wary of sleeping. I think this is the first story I have ever read where Kags was a snake! Anyways, there are a few spelling and use errors, and a few areas that were a little rambling and confusing, but other than that, I liked this very much! Keep up the good work!

It has promise, and I do intend to read more.  I spotted several grammar/spelling errors that 'spellcheck' would not catch, such as women vs woman in the very first chapter, but they are not so many as to be distracting. 

As I said, interesting beginning - now I'm off to read more.

Interesting start so far and with a little work this could turn into a very good story.  A few things to point out, noticed you've used 'waste' when it should be 'waist'.  Waste is referring to trash or to waste an opportunity, waist would be the part of the body.  Also noticed 'on' instead of 'one'.  And I'd recommend giving more details rather than just a lot of dialog.  Too many one line paragraphs in a row tends to interupt the story flow. 

It is quite an interesting storyline with Kagome & family being serpent youkai and she also possessing miko like powers. A war of the Roses if you would. To have them both be dreaming of each other and not knowing it - leaves a lot of exciting possibilites for the future.

I did notice that you used the word 'waste' instead of 'waist' a few times...but aside that, it was well written.

This story is wickedly awsome, you have a wonderful plot and your follow through is very thorough, and you describe everything exceptionally well, i am very impressed... it was a pleasure to read so far and i will be eagerly awaiting the next chapter!!!