I cannot wait for the next chapter! I love Sesshoumaru's point of view, especially his comments on Kagome's drunken actions XP
OK so in the beginning I wanted to say I like your story. I admit that the part where Higurashi's family sends her to America is unbelieveable cause they are poor and she didn't have time to study. But i still decided to give it a try.
After the fourth chapter I got tired of reading two almost identical stories so I skip Sesshoumaru POV. I think you should stop writing 2 POVs of the same situations. It's boring and annoying and boring again. I feel like you treat readers as idiots cause you explain same stuff twice. I don't think it's necessery to me to know how Kagome smells (and feels). That is the biggest difference.
Please write Dai Youkai because Tai Youkai means Fish demon.
Good luck with the story
Wow, I'm so glad that you updated this story. I've really been missing it!!! So sad about InuYasha though...
Ashes (Chapter 8) - Sun 15 Feb 2009
I like it! Your story makes me smile. Thank you so much for the update. I can't wait to see what you decided to do to Inuyasha.
snowbird (Chapter 8) - Sat 14 Feb 2009
| I like the plot of the story. I just thought she was silly for not wanting to be recognized by him. Her disguises while funny were rather silly and immature. Her reasons not being very well thought out that he was no longer the same as he was when she knew him in the past. After all, it has been 500+ years for him and no one stays the same as the years go by. I'm glad she's finally begining to be relaxed with him. I'm a little confused about her time in the past. Did she say that she was there 3 years and after Naraku was eliminated, she stayed in the future for 3 years because the well stopped working. Then one day it opened up again to let her go back for another 3 years and one day just closed up sending her back? Do I have that right? It also sounded like she and Inuyasha were a couple that last 3 years. So does that mean they were married? mated? or what? Sorry, if I'm full of questions. One thing I'm having problems with is your repeating your scenes. You can combine their thoughts in one scene. Other authors do it. I find myself mostly skipping when you repeat the same scene from his point of view since most of the wording is the same. Other than that, the story is on my fav list.
I really like this bit of writing. I like how you have fashioned Sesshomaru and how he and Kagome aren't falling all over each other.
Ashes (Chapter 7) - Mon 02 Feb 2009
HAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA! I left a comment for the wrong chapter. It was supposed to be for this chapter. Oh well... you get the idea.
Ashes (Chapter 6) - Mon 02 Feb 2009
Oh NO! The divider line was MIA! I was confused for all of 2-5 seconds, give or take.
I really really really liked this chapter. You're spoiling me with updating so quickly. I'm going to cry if you get all busy with life and stuff. Eh, but that's ok as long as you finish it I'll live. (^_^) *tee hee*
Have a most wonderous week!
This was a good chapter but there's something weird going on. It's like the chapter repeats itself half-way through with a slightly different ending (more description or words).
| "He liked their Oreo Blizzards" lol i loved it!! lol I can't wait for the next one.
I'm loving this story. So curious about what's going to happen next.
Ashes (Chapter 6) - Sat 31 Jan 2009
*sniff* Rin died! So sad! Poor Sesshoumaru!*blows nose*
Anyway, good story. I like it a lot and am looking forward to what happens next! I really like how I get both perspectives without it becomming boring. Well done.
Oh, you updated! I'm so glad, because I love this story! It is very original, and interesting. And I really like your writing style! Enjoyed your latest chapter a lot, and can't wait for more!
Ashes (Chapter 5) - Sun 14 Dec 2008
You did very well! This story was very intertaining and I really liked the insight into Sesshoumaru's new mind set. Very nice.
I especially liked how you could tell the story from both sides without it becoming stale or boring.
An over all excellent piece of work. I look forward to future chapters.
tina (Chapter 5) - Sun 14 Dec 2008
a new chappy YAYS!!! , lol I love how you play both POV's I also like how you have made sessy more approchable and kags more like a normal girl who would wonder why someone who she always considered an enemy being nice all of a sudden ( well all of a sudden for her since the time spans for them are really really diffrent )
I know what he wants, baby. Yeah! Please, write more soon!!!!
I love that line "Stop messing with me, Sesshomaru!" This story is so interesting and fun, you're really getting me hooked!
Kagome, like girls? No wonder she took so many baths with Sango. Great writing, I'm loving this story.
Sess knows!!! What will he do? I can't wait to find out what happens next...
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