I'm sorry, but I could not get all the way through the first chapter. It had the makings of a great story, but there were so many spelling errors, missing punctuation, and grammar mistakes, that I felt I had to give up. It kind of read like something I'd see in my news feed on facebook. Interesting, but missing letters from words like "wedding" spelled as "weddin" in the very first paragraph. I think if you simply slowed down when you are typing and proof-read as you go, it will turn out perfectly, because you have all you need, it just needs a bit of sprucing up. Oh, and as you read, read it aloud, where you pause in speaking, there should usually be a comma. Or, where you insert something into a sentence that could be removed completely and the sentence still make sense, it needs two commas, one on either side of the insert. For example, "Why oh why did I drink too much?" should look like this, "Why, oh why, did I drink so much?" because you can simply say "Why did I drink so much?" and still have a complete sentence. Now, I replaced "too" with "so" because generally when people are speaking they either say “I drank too much" or "Why did I drink so much?" But, because your character is speaking, this could very well be acceptable if that's how you wish for your character to speak. I hope this helps, because as I said, you have all the pieces of a good story, it just needs a tiny bit of sprucing up.
--Kaminoko (c)2011
Finally! >:D Even though she was kinda anooying me when she didnt want to tell Sess... but thne again >> i like those typese of stories lol
*tear* so sweet. i love it!
Booyaka! That's Much better!
Now he just has to tell her that the pup's not the Only reason he wants to be with her.
Thanks for writing!
YESH! I was waiting so much for this chapter~ Thnx for uploading!
joyouki (Chapter 23) - Fri 09 Sep 2011
Thank you for the update..love the story and seering how Sess is coming around. I hope to see him in an excitted state of watching Kagome grow with his child.
Sessygurl (Chapter 23) - Thu 08 Sep 2011
Awesome chapter! I love this story, I cant wait for more.
oh ouch -she told everyone Before him. I mean... I guess it couldn't be help, circumstances and everything, but still... ouch.
But Booyaka! :happy dances: They're -kinda- together again! ^_^
Thanks for writing!
NOOOO Dx You got me interested in this story! NOW U MUST UPDATE! NOWWWWWW D<
joyouki (Chapter 21) - Fri 26 Aug 2011
AW juicy! I so need a very long chapter lol! I'm so glad to read that Kagome is going to tell everyone the truth, and I hope she gives Sess a chance and see he does want the same things and his pup!
Wow..Great chapter.. I cant wait untill she tells everyone about Her, Sesshomaru, and now the baby...Keep up the good work and i will be waiting for the next chapter...Thanks for the Updates
joyouki (Chapter 20) - Thu 25 Aug 2011
I'm so excited!!! Sess you are so dumb, you should have never called out her name...with your demon speed you could have just cared what people saw and jumped out and followed her...I hope she doesn't miss her appointment...The baby needs his youki to develope right...well hopefully the doctor will tell her that no matter what she has to be near the father or she could lose the baby. She will just have to tell Sess that she doesn't want him to feel obligated since he told her before that he didn't want kids but she and the baby will be in danger if he is not around....of course Sess will have to swallow his pride and tell her he loves her and that she has changed him...yes I would love to read from you that Sess can break down and cry...that he made a mistake and couldn't live without her...I can't wait for all the lemony fluffy goodness..lol
:headdeskt: Kagome! :bangs head: Puckernuts, girl! He's TRYING! C'mon... after seeing Kouga needing to be with his pregnant mate you can hurt your own pup like that not being around the father? :bang head: ow...
Thanks for writing.
Terryanna (Chapter 19) - Thu 25 Aug 2011
Your spelling errors are becoming annoying, especially when you misspell something as simple as New Yoirk- New York. But it's a good story so far.
Blaire (Chapter 17) - Mon 22 Aug 2011
And the truth shall set you freeeeeee!!! haha. drama drama drama. it's great :)
joyouki (Chapter 17) - Mon 22 Aug 2011
Sooooooo very juicy...I can't stand it!! Thank you for making my Monday night so much more exciting..Can't wait for more moremore!!!!
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