This is a fantastic beginning to a really good story. I love your detail and the flow is incredible. You really have to had how men always were believed over women in that period, and even now in some countries or cultures.
I look forward to reading this further.
Ooooooh, I'd like to get my Tae Kwon Do hands on that sonofabitch... I applaude Kagome, she fought and won and didn't let up... I rater admired her when she still didn't brake no matter the beatings and whippings she took ... That's a strong woman ...
And, hell with it, I'm just clickin' Fav Author and be done with it
Seriously though, you make me feel like a child when I read your work. Everything is flowing and excellently written, I can't help but to compare my megre writing to yours, and despair.
Pleeeeas update your works soon
~lily
Smortz (Chapter 2) - Tue 26 Jul 2011
:O Finally! I review! I wanted to review when I first read this (which was on a boat on a cell phone, yes) and my phone was all 'oh look at this pretty white box, where it says 'type here', I'm going to think this is a picture! >:3 You can't review. BWUAHAHA. >.> So I had to wait until we were on land, on my laptop.
-clears throat- THIS CHAPTER WAS SO GOOD. I mean in a totally in, 'HECK YES, KAGOME!' I wanted to transport myself into the chapter as a ghost and be all IN YOUR FACE, you manly pigs!
I really love how you have turned Kagome into a woman who thinks, and I don't mean that as an insult. In the manga/anime, I tend to find her annoying in multiple situations where it's like 'use your brian, girl!' but in this chapter I was very pleased with her mental processes. I was especially happy when she DID defend herself instead of screaming 'HELP.' ^_~
Thank you for such a marvelous story!
Your dedicated reader,
~Smo
Ashes (Chapter 2) - Mon 25 Jul 2011
I like your story so far. Your doing very well balancing events with description and dialogue. I don't feel over or underwhelmed at any point in either of your chapters. Kudos for keeping with the historically accurate portrayal of that douche getting let off the hook (like brave heart. *so sad*).
I can't wait to see where you go with this story. Kagome the spy? the defector? the changer of history maybe?! Don't leave me hanging too long. (~_^) Good luck.
I'm surprised Lord Fluffy didn't step in to aid Kagome a bit. Go Kags! Kick that coward's butt... with any luck, she'll get to castrate him later.
Please update soon!
oh goody another chapter!! that's nice!
I love a tough-Kagome. I easily envison her growing into a fierce woman. And yes, this kind of things did happen... she should have shoved his privates up his nose for that... lol
Look forward to more ^_^
Dewa mata
That is a wonderful story. I think I know where this is going though. Is this the reason why Kagome cannot find any youkai in her time; because of this army of miko and monks and soldiers?
Please continue with this story, I really like it.
Great beginning. Definitely piqued my interest. :)
Ow, very nice start! I'm curious to know how it unfolds... and as I like the monk a lot, I wonder how Kag/Sess/Miroku dynamics will be...
Wonderful first chapter! =D
Smortz (Chapter 1) - Sat 23 Jul 2011
:O It's you! Again! Writing another wonderful story!
-prances around Dokuga- I am blessed!
I loved this chapter, and the story sounds promising! Excellent writing, and there were tiny lil snippets that made me either giggle or snort. <-- and I do snort.
>-> Anyways! I don't want to be all 'squeeeaaalll update sooon!' cause I know you'll update when you want to update....
However! I am eying the home screen, impatiently awaiting your next wonderful chapter.
~Smo
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