Reviews for Destined Love by Valore

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LadyoftheLemons (Chapter 35) - Wed 03 Jul 2019

All the an in the middle of the text is distracting. Also you have alot of typos. The plot its self is good 


sesshysgirl (Chapter 35) - Tue 14 Aug 2012

Suka25 (Chapter 14) - Thu 17 May 2012

2nd time reading this and its still funny!!!!!!!!!!


Dlat (Chapter 3) - Sun 14 Aug 2011

Me again. I've now read two more chapters of your story and I have to say that I have noticed a significant amount of typos and grammar errors. I would suggest you either get someone to read your chapters before you post them, or read them out loud as this helps you know where to place commas and things like that. Also, there are a couple continuity errors I have found. You state that Kagome has been taking lessons from a miko since a year before she fell down the well. But Kagome does not know anything about weaponry when she falls down the well. She doesn't even know she's a miko. Also, the blood loss from that short of a time frame from the size wound I would imagine a pebble capable of making would not make Sesshoumaru lose consciousness, unless you are suggesting that she actually created a LARGE hole in his chest.


Dlat (Chapter 1) - Sun 14 Aug 2011

Ok, so I'm totally intrigued by this story and will be continuing my reading of it, but I wanted to point out something in this chapter that confuses me. A little more than halfway through the chapter--just after the beginning of the scene in the museum--there is a sentence that confuses me.

 

"The woman stopped noticing the look on Kagome's face, knowing she was recalling fond memories... but unknown to her they were memories of the child of which she spoke."

 

Ok, so did you mean the woman stopped after she noticed the look on Kagome's face? Or do you mean that she stopped noticing Kagome's expression and ignored her? That may not seem like a big deal, but a placement of a comma there between "stopped" and "noticing" drastically changes the meaning of the sentence (and sorry if I sound annoying. I'm an Creative Writing major so I can't help but notice these things). Also, who was recalling fond memories? Because if it's Kagome who's recalling the memories, how would the woman know she was? She doesn't know that Kagome knows Sesshoumaru. In fact, there would be absolutely no reason for her to even fathom such thoughts, unless she is in fact Rin. And if she is Rin, and you just don't want the reader to know she's Rin at this point, I would suggest taking that part of the sentence out. It just makes the scene too confusing.

 

Anyways, that was the only thing that stood out to me in this chapter. I love the story so far, I love stories where Kagome discovers something about her travels in the past before they happen to her. Although, having watched Back to the Future numerous times as a child, I always wonder at the space time continum when I read these stories...but that is a different thought entirely. So, ahem....I shall continue with my reading now.


SashaMarie (Chapter 35) - Tue 12 Apr 2011

I love this story. I have read it twice now and it is even better then the first time. There is one thing I dont get though, durring the lemon with Kagome and Sesshoumaru. She was confused when I did not hurt then she remembered that Sesshoumaru had taken care of the little problem earlier in the story. Well wouldnt she have remembered that it hurt with Naraku? Or when she made the wish did the wish take care of her little fear of men? Anyways thats the only part I was a little confused on. Other then that It was an AWESOME story.


lara (Chapter 35) - Mon 07 Feb 2011

I'm very happy that it had a happy ending & that was good. The part about Naraku raping & marking Kagome I could have lived without it as it was too horrible of a fate for anyone to suffer through & for you to have it happen to Kagome who suffered the most throughout the story, I personally didn't see where it added anything to the story but it's your tale to tell & how you chose to tell it & since you did put it in there I just wish you would have told us what happened to the digusting mating mark from Naraku after that horrible rape ??? after she was dumped & left to be found by her friends & they saw it you never mentioned if it stayed until she was marked by Kagome or did it disappear when he died or did it  start to fade shortly after she had received it because it was against her will (or better yet...did it never really happen to her physically & the whole experience was only one of his illusions ?)?? I've read in other stories that a mating mark will only stay permanent if the 2 agree or are in love but the strongest mating marks & bonds are with 2 who mate out of love & a mating mark given against a persons will or during a rape will fade & dissappear & even though I read it in a story I would prefer it to be so......to even think that a woman marked against her will or while raped would be permanent & binding is too awful to consider.

I also wonder why when Naraku raped & marked Kagome he bit her & then made her drink his blood...I've read in stories that the only way for the mated couple to have a complete bond is if they both drank each other's blood but when Sessh finally marked Kagome you didn't have Kagome drink Sessh's so since she was forced to drink Naraku's I'm hoping you just left it out when you described Sessh & Kagome but they really did do the same...Oh & I wondering since you didn't mention it in your story but when a couple is Mated are their lives extended since youkai's are basically immortal, if one were human or Miko & the other Youkai they'd live as long as their youkai partner....since they Mate for life it would be too sad if it did not work out that way. 

I wish you'd have told us what Sessh & Kagome's pup were born to be as I was hoping & looking forward for all of Sessh & Kagome's pups  to be born as purebred Inu Tai Youkai or better yet Miko-Inu Tai Youkai so that they were pure,powerful & strong with the powers,strength's & abilities of both of them...for 2 people who suffered (especially Kagome)& had to go thru so much to finally find happiness. It would have been horrible if their pups were hanyou because they would have to constantly worry that their demon blood would one day over power their human blood so I really hope that aside from the fact that Sessh & Kagome had to fight so hard & what they did saved the world/future  & for a Miko as powerful & Kagome & an Inu Tai Youkai as powerful as Sessh they are 2 people that really did deserve to have strong fulll blooded powerful pups that would be powerful in their own rights so that they (Kagome & Sessh) wouldn't have to worry the rest about them for the rest of their lives like they'd have to if the pups were hanyou/half breeds...I don't mean it in a derogatory way.


NimbusNumberNine (Chapter 35) - Tue 10 Aug 2010

Absolutely amazing!!!!

I enjoyed reading this so much! Kudos!!!

Thank you!! :D :D

NNN~<3


Anonymous (Chapter 29) - Wed 14 Jul 2010

oh my god this chapter was so emotional even i was crying by the end of the chapter! my heart went to kagome, i have never been through that but it was so painful to read


Angeltsuki (Chapter 35) - Sat 05 Jun 2010

It was a great fic, and I enjoyed it for many days :3 Please continue to write wonderful stories.


Inu Guardian (Chapter 35) - Mon 15 Feb 2010

I have waited so long to finish reading this story.  I had helping finding it just so I could read it all the way through.  I love it.  Thank you for writing something so wonderful and sharing it with us!


sahar fahad (Chapter 10) - Thu 12 Nov 2009

hiiiiiiiiiii omg i really love your storys the one that i most like is Destined Love i just wanted to say keep up the good work :))) :p


FlamingSilverDog (Chapter 35) - Sun 01 Nov 2009

hey bravo...it was just wonderful...and amazing....also really good...i loved it...totally enjoyed it cant cant read more stories written by u...luv yah :P


Cinthia (Chapter 2) - Mon 04 Aug 2008
woooow that was super awesome and i can't wait for you to update =]. Good luck with your story

LadySafire (Chapter 2) - Wed 23 Jul 2008
Not so high and mighty now, are we, Seeshomaru-sama? LOL Great story, would love to see an update soon.

VampireGoddess12Xx (Chapter 2) - Tue 22 Jul 2008
I quite enjoyed this :] please post more chapters soon

Shay (Chapter 2) - Tue 22 Jul 2008
i like it everything is great and i love the plot, you have done a good job and i cannot wait till your next one! :)

fluffy 101 (Chapter 1) - Thu 10 Jul 2008
i love it. its is a very good story keep going. haha cant wait to see what happens next!!!

JPStarlet (Chapter 1) - Thu 10 Jul 2008
Please please update =) I added your story to my favs!! So update it

Bluemiko (Chapter 1) - Wed 09 Jul 2008
Love what you have so far. I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the good work & please update soon:)

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