I was enjoying the story, though the plot seemed to have turned. Aa I think stated kagura went from kikyos friend to and ex-wife and suddenly there is a child. But inutaishos been whining about grandpuos that he apparently already had? Outside some plot holes such as this it has been a nice read. And you write well. I have always love the plots that have kagome as a cafe owner and Sesshomaru a business man. Keep up the good work.
She let 2 strangers who pulled up next to her like a hooked take her to their home, changed into clothes they gave her and then went out to a club with them? Would I be considered either old, naive or stupid to feel that she is an idiot?
I just realized that it described Rin as seeming human but Sesshomaru is not so was she adopted? I'm a bit confused by the flow of the storyline and the conflicting information being given.
Why did Kagura go from being a friend of Kikyo who went for dress fittings in the earlier chapter to being Sessh's ex-wife who nobody gets along with?
Great story
Ahhh! darn it. It was getting pretty good until this chapter. Sesshoumaru was married to Kagura and had a child. This killed it for me. I felt this was put in suddenly but thanks for keeping me hooked for a bit but now I must take my exit and try to forget this.
I loved it! Actually just read straight through and its 2 30 am cause I kept saying 'one more chapter' lol
Wonderful (:
I just read this again and as always, I love it! I love all your stories!
Love it!!! You my dear are a very talented author and should keep up the good work!
Lauren (Chapter 6) - Tue 05 Apr 2016
There are a few continuity issues here. You said much earlier in the story that Kagura was a bridesmaid, but now say that she's Sesshoumaru's ex with whom he had a child? You mentioned Rin being in the wedding in the third or fourth chapter, but now Kagome is asking to mert her? I also don't get the jokes (the random cult and drug bits). It seems very immature/middle school for a group that's supposed to be ranging from twenty-eight to thirty-five.
I wonder how Kagome can.claim that she thinks she loves Sesshoumaru, and how Sesshoumaru could have such strong feelings for Kagome, when they haven't really spent any time together. They barely know anything about one another. It feels like the story was written at three different times...
I thought they were married not mated????
Darn! Did it again! I quit! Loved the story!
Sorry, I hate it when I mess up a preview.
Very nice finish! Everyone is happy and Karma ad her way with the bad guys. I see now that you had worked on this over a long period of time, which would explain some of the disjointedness. Nice story and one day, when your muse is pelting you with plunnies, maybe you can do a littlebre- editing. Cheers!
Yeah! Here comes the Calvary!
HAHAHA! In laws to be can be so much fun!
Oh that is evil! I'm really hoping that karma gets her chance.
Very nice chapter and the brothers are in agreement on disowning their ditzy dad! LOL!
Well, well, well...why isn't that POS in jail awaiting trail. Nice to have a rich daddy to bail you out. Great twist.
What a hardhead! Jumps right to the wrong conclusion.
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