That was awesome even though Inuyasha is the one who put her in this perdicament and he knows it, i love how yelled for kagome to kick the ex mistresses ass lmao quickly post another of your exellecnt chapters!
amy (Chapter 5) - Fri 08 Jul 2011
Lovely chapter! I truly enjoy this story, more updates please!
amy (Chapter 4) - Fri 01 Jul 2011
Is the red eyed man sesshy? Naraku is dead, so it must be him. As far as the lemon is concerned, It should take place in his chamber,making it official that they are lovers and he was meant to be with her!
amy (Chapter 3) - Mon 27 Jun 2011
I love your new chappie! Your announcement of her new position was a stroke of genius! It is true Myouga is Sesshy's messenger, in many stories, like "Dominance" where he gets a message from Inuyasha needing help! I am glad she took him up on his offer, she really had no choice based on the eras way of dealing with women mating already mated men , even if they don't know it!
mew (Chapter 3) - Tue 14 Jun 2011
lol, nice idea of the alcohol, kudos to your genuis ideas.
amy (Chapter 2) - Fri 10 Jun 2011
excellent chappie! I hope she finds happines in her new position!
Definitely better with the spacing. Great Job on thes econd chapter. Keep up the good work.
Kouga should find him, and smell kagome on him, and then maybe THEN i'll feel like that might be enough.
o.o inuyasha should have his butt handed to him!
I am quite interested to say the least. I found it hard to read though as everything was just pushed together. If you dont mind can you please seperate paragraphs and the talking text.
For example.
Paragraph
"Talking"
Thank you ^.^ I wish to read more
amy (Chapter 1) - Thu 09 Jun 2011
Will she accept his offer? It may be the only way!
It's not a bad start to the story. There are a few sentence structure and capitalization errors, but most importantly you have to sepearte the paragraphs more. The story so far is written as two big walls of text which tend to turn away a lot of readers upon sight. Separate the scenes more and make a few grammar changes and you should be fine.
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