That was very cute. I love how Shipopu thinks of himself. ^_^
Keep it up & thanks for writing.
Nice story line. A few grammarical errors but nothing major. Also I need to say with the way you write, um, you need to find a way to make it flow better, it is a bit choppy but not bad. I like it, it is a good story so far.
Rodneya (Chapter 1) - Wed 27 Jul 2011
why havent you updated??? all the other reviews were left in may. THIS IS FLIPPIN JULY!!!!!!! update soon please :)
Great job Demon! :)
This has potential. I look forwrad to seeing how it evolves.
Thanks for writing.
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