I love this story - all of it. Not sure why you are not happy with the length of it, but it seems to be following the right path. Sometimes things like this take their own course regardless of what we think it will be. I like how you tell the story from the different prospectives and the flow is working nicely. I am looking forward to the next chapter!
You're welcome :D Gosh, I'm flattered that you actually mentioned me! *blush* Anyway, love this chapter! :) Especially line "oh-so yummy". When I read it I thought Yummy yummy yummy I've got love in my tummy :D
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=-uo9tMoew6o
Chelsea H. (Chapter 4) - Sat 25 Jun 2011
.........................................................................................did you seriously just stop right there??????? I was furiously clicking my keypad when I realized this was indeed the end. THe biggest cliffy in my entire LIFE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Great job so far. I can't wait to see how this plays out though.
mika (Chapter 4) - Sat 25 Jun 2011
I really like your story. I don't want it to end so soon! =)
One more can't hurt! :)
Awe, poor Inuyasha. Sure he's an oblivious, loud-mouthed twit, but he means well. Hopefully his heart doesn't get stomped on too badly. Teenage heartbreak can seem like the end of the world.
Anywho, good chapter. Can't wait for the fifth and final!
good job cant wait to read the last chp
Oooh cliffy, love it! It just keeps geting better :) Also take as many chapters as you need. Don't worry about length because if you feel like writing more than what you originally planned you should do it!
Genocide of the unfaithful (Chapter 3) - Fri 17 Jun 2011
yes but this lie is a good lie so its ok.
Sunset Senshi (Chapter 3) - Fri 17 Jun 2011
All that was running through my mind was that song by Victoria Justice "My best friend's brother BFB" ha ha ha OMG it's perfect I love this story and please throw in as MANY chapters as you wish! I love it! Can't get enough.
Aww *.* Cant wait to read next chapter! :P Do your best :3
This is so cute! I love the idea and the shifting points of view are well placed. I can't help but think of Victoria Justice's new song Best Friends Brother everytime I read the title though. It fits the story somewhat haha
dittoreader (Chapter 2) - Wed 15 Jun 2011
This is is a cute story - I like it just the way it was written. Not sure why you weren't happy with it. the only thing I'm puzzled about was her question about him maybe trying to kill her??? Thank you for your creative writing though. I enjoyed it!
Avireader (Chapter 2) - Wed 08 Jun 2011
This story is so cute. I love the way it was told from different perspectives in two different chapters. Wonder what the next chapter will bring with a cliffhanger like that.
Patricia (Chapter 2) - Tue 31 May 2011
this chapter just made me a follower of the story. looking forward to the next!
Don't be so hard on yourself! This chapter is awesome!
*What does she mean this isn't good? Better than I'd be able to write.... Darn people with talent!*
Sessygurl (Chapter 2) - Mon 30 May 2011
This story is so cute and well done. I cant wait to see what happens next, especially with that cliffy.
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