Reviews for Talk to Me by ArisaChan

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Twilight Dawn (Chapter 5) - Tue 17 May 2011

I really enjoyed reading the chapters currently posted and anxiously await for more. I think this story has the means to go far. Good Luck!


Nyuka (Chapter 5) - Tue 17 May 2011

XD


kashi (Chapter 5) - Tue 17 May 2011

just like inu to grab attention in his own way. can't wait to see what will happen next, update again soon.


kashi (Chapter 4) - Mon 16 May 2011

^^, sessh to the rescue. great chapters, update again soon.


amy (Chapter 3) - Mon 16 May 2011

lovely fan fic! this is my first time reading it, i love your style of writing the characters, their reactions, and behaviors, spot on, keep up the good work and as always "MORE CHAPTERS PLEASE!"


Ameakis (Chapter 4) - Mon 16 May 2011

zandrellia (Chapter 4) - Mon 16 May 2011

Nice!

Omega: “Did you private message me to ask how I am?” <--- Still laughing at this. That was pure perfection. Good job with Sesshomaru's characterization.

This was well done. All I would say is that when doing a scene that happened before the events of your most recent chapter that you should try to hint that it is a memory of some kind.

Oh my... "And you decided that I am of clear mind? That’s presumptuous." haha...  XD Love it.

 

~Z



sugar0o who lurks (Chapter 3) - Mon 16 May 2011

good chapter!


loneshinobi (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011

I am really liking this story. The mysterious omega can't wait for the meeting !


Thatz (Chapter 3) - Mon 16 May 2011

This is such a good stoy so cute keep it up can't wait to see what happens next.


zandrellia (Chapter 3) - Mon 16 May 2011

Congratulations on your first attempt at a fanfiction! (An exciting feeling, no? :D)

I love the concept of this particular story. Although, I would say that this is more an Alternate Universe (AU) and less Canon work as they seem to have been placed in an unusual situation that did not happen within the canon series. (Kagome, Sesshomaru, Miroku, Sango, and Hojo all attending college in modern times.)

Also, it seems a bit rushed. Kagome and Omega/Sesshomaru have only known each other for "a few days" and yet they are very close. He calls her "little one" which is highly affectionate and offers to protect her, transfer colleges (not always easy), and move to an apartment nearby just because Hojo got a little carried away with his emotions? It just feels like things are going somewhat too quickly. It might be nice if you tried to flesh out the story a little and give some more motivations for their actions, perhaps through some relationship building. (Maybe by having them remember their past conversations?)

Keep working on this and I am sure it will only get better!

~Z


Itoe (Chapter 3) - Mon 16 May 2011

Oh wow, good story!! lol I like the idea very much! ]:D I hope he will beat the crap out of Hojo... xD lol


CandIcane (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011

Your story is really good I cannot wait for the next post , and I'm really looking forward to seeing where you take this. Keep up the good work.

 


vicki patterson (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011

love it, thanks for the great storym keep up the great work, cant wait til next chapter, please hurry with it.:D


KEdakumi (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011

ooo... Sess gets to kick some Hojo butt, I hope. :)  Can't wait to see where you take this.  Please update again soon!


LittleSingingBird (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011

So I'm really intrigued about this story. It has alot of potential and a really solid story line so I cant wait to see what you come up with for the up-comming chapters for this story. KEEP UP THE GRET WORK! :3


kathryn (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011

very interesting story can't wait to read more


violet (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011

i reallyy like how this story is turning out keep up the good work =)


kashi (Chapter 2) - Mon 16 May 2011

>.< eww hojo, that guy gives me the creeps too *shudders*. he does need a good butt kicking doesn't he lol. i'll be waiting to read more ^^.


kashi (Chapter 1) - Mon 16 May 2011

XD i'm loving this story already and can't wait for more.


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