This is a promising begining. You captured the older/younger sister dynamic really well (at least from my experience). Again, great first impression and can't wait to see how it plays out.
Ah, a note. While Kagome is talking to Kikyo she says:
"Look, you can't try and fix me up with every man that might seem perfect who you've come across. If we haven't yet yet then the kami hasn't meant for us to,"
I think the first 'yet' in the second sentence is supposed to be 'met'. It's an easy mistake that spell check won't have picked up for you.
Azurena (Chapter 1) - Tue 10 May 2011
Ah! So cute! Please write more soon! I loved this first chapter! *squeals* Eagerly looking forward to more!
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