lol. So silly, and yet so great. I love it. I loved the 'Marvelous' and the 'Madrosis' ones the best. XD
Hi! Nice use of the themes provided by the prompts. You chose some pretty cute moments to portray out there! However, if I may offer some constructive advice? I noticed that Sesshoumaru is badly out of character. Since you haven't posted any warnings about it, it comes off as very jarring. Sesshoumaru, as he is in the anime doesn't get flustered, doesn't whine, doesn't act like a "normal guy". However, in your fic he does all of that, and in general, doesn't seem like he's Sesshoumaru at all, except for the name. You have some nice ideas going for you, but perhaps if you worked on characterisation, they'd read much better. Just putting my two cents in! ^_^
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