because our next possibility to leave the enclosure will be earliest in twelve days - it sounds a bit awkward...i suggest changing this part, making it simpler. 
  
internal mail system, a  
  
How long has he been in this condition? 
  
I am much too busy 
  
Believe me when I say that Dr. Yasoda is capable of taking care of your son. Please send your next letter 
  
Again, a few grammatical mistakes I found in this one... 
  
And you..grrrr...I was expecting her to carry on the correspondence herself! NOT hand it over to someone else! 
      
wiriting to you in an attempt to 
  
slowly but surely 
  
so many doctors and healers of all kinds 
  
So please be so kind as to contact 
  
details are attached  
  
  
Nice opening, and it has my interest. I'll be waiting on this one to end, too, so make sure you finish fast! ^_~  
      
*chanting* 
I WANT MORE!! I WANT MORE!!! I WANT MORE!!!! 
And you are so bookmarked, listed and stalked. <3 
      
   
   
 
 
 
										 
									
									
																										
								
								
								
																								
															
													
					
				
								
				
				
			
				
				
		
				
	
			
			
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