Your introduction was written like a good base. You know future plots, mini stories within stories in a greater design. Short and sweet to the point, your disctiption. Or aka it was elegantly put with a beautiful backround. ^-^ And the spelling is better than mine lol. Thank you for writing!
Momo (Chapter 1) - Wed 07 Mar 2012
I love the plot, and the emotion in the writing. I can't wait for Kagome to be introduced! I hope you haven't abandoned the story, because I'd really like to see where you're taking it.
Nenyanna (Chapter 1) - Fri 15 Apr 2011
Hey! I really like the prologue thus far. Your writing style is very interesting and the storyline looks promising!
Do you need an editor?
This wasn't a bad start at all. I'm quite interested in seeing where this goes.
silent Walker (Chapter 1) - Fri 15 Apr 2011
I love it, when can we have more?
kurtella (Chapter 1) - Fri 15 Apr 2011
Your prologue was fine. I mean, a prologue is meant to introduce primary characters and to whet a reader's appetite, any you did with mine. It's an intresting take on the whole Sesshoumaru/Kagome pairing. It was well-written and the scenes were described beautifully. I especially liked how Sesshoumaru actually has feelings, unlike the canon version. Can't wait to see what happens next!
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