okay just finished reading the chapter, aside from what i mentioned earlier, this seems a tiny bit rushed. I would also think that kagome would try to go home, sneak around and get maybe some KY to help with Her/His situation.
Not only that but kagome seems like the emotional type. You can give this fiction a lot more depth if you had her possibly cry about it, Sess isn't misrter emotional, and so probably wouldnt see what the big deal is. Not that it'd be rape persay b/c She's willing if only to get her help being changed back into a female, but also to keep Ses away from Sesshoamru. But i think she'd fight it a little more. This i imagine could be built up between tension and finally acceptance, at which point Sess could see more value for her, and see that she needs training, and that typically that is the role that this type of relationship takes.
lastly, if kagome does still have girl bits, as a "miko/priest" @_@ would she lose her powers if she's deflowered? if so, Sesshomaru probably made it so that she cant sense jewelshards or purify the jewel.
i also wonder if Kagome's still go girl bits, can she get preggy? and will this change be permi? and if she can get preggy will HE? If so, i would proabaly put a wanring on ficcy -nods-
well.. one more, How's inuyasha gunna take that his shard detector's been "defiled?"
EITHER WAY!! loved this! sorry if i'm being a butt and asking too much. i've actually been waiting for this one to update! i went looking and re-read it a while ago.
I'm confused. Not to use vulgar terms, but kagome's a male with male bits, and girl bits? and the spacing is off.
amy (Chapter 2) - Sun 24 Jul 2011
Please update soon, and I vote for a lemon, what else would happen,she is to be his lover, no doubt!
monkeybiter (Chapter 2) - Mon 18 Apr 2011
finish finish hurry hurry!
amy (Chapter 2) - Sat 16 Apr 2011
I vote for a lemon , why not he could get pregnant!
snowy_winter (Chapter 2) - Tue 12 Apr 2011
yes please continue
wow, is all i really have to say
though on a tech, might want to look into the spacing, you have one massive wall of text there, and if there's not a warning, then you may want to make this fic as M/M b/c some people may not want to read it if they know it's not M/F.
But... WOW! I give you props for Kagome actually doing that, b/c seriously wouldnt you wonder about what it feels like?
Good start, I wounder why Sesshoumaru stayed around, is it because he feels like he should help Kagome scene she saved Rin? Anyway I like your story and I hope that you can update soon so that we can see if/and how Kagome can became a girl again. And how this will effect Sesshoumaru's and Kagome's relationship.
so interesting! more please!
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