Excellent chapter! I'm glad you were able to take the suggestions and make something out of them. I can't wait to see more :)
I really like this story, its unique! You should defo continue it! I think that if you showed a chapter of Kagome learning techniques for spells or maybe sword play it would be good. You could have her failing a few times at it so Jaken steps in to help her as target practice, it would be funny XD
Then you could maybe have those other demonesses turn up in another chapter claming that Sesshoumaru's servent was looking for suitable mates for his lord, which would land Jaken in hot water with Sesshoumaru and also maybe give Kagome a chance to show her new skills and that shes a better prospect as a mate. I like the idea of a bonus chapter with his failed attempts at getting them together, and then after that just have them getting togther because of something minor that he did, it would be funny since he put so much effort into making sinarios for them to get togther that something he did by accident actually did the job better than him. Also Koga could show up to make Sesshoumaru jelous if you wanted :D
Just some thoughts, but I really like it so far! xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Mona (Chapter 4) - Mon 06 Apr 2015
I enjoyed reading the fanfic and hope you continue.
emma (Chapter 4) - Mon 06 Apr 2015
I think this is the first story i've ever read from Jaken's POV. He doesn't get enough love, all that loyalty and devotion for nothing! Loved this and hope to see more soon.
How about Jaken "suggesting" that Sesshomaru train Kagome so that Kagome can become strong and so that they spend more time together?
LOVE IT BY THE WAY!!!! YOU NEED TO UPDATE!!!!
I do believe squacking is in order! -jokes and ponders- I have no idea.
'Sometimes the strength inside is better than out.' Or you can come up with spells, training, ect... Hope that helps to give you something. Oh paragraph 4, sentence 5, (He thought was Rin was the worse he had come across, and then he had met the elder ones.) I think you might want to take out the first (was)
Lol that was amusing. -eyes light up- If you can come up with how Jaken thinks I believe you can come up with almsot anything! Half the time you never really know and thats what adds to the fun. Awh -sighs- kids.
Thank you for writing.
Oh my gosh! When I read the title of your story "Little Green Matchmaker" I was like 'did that just say...' and I re-read it and the summary. I was appauled. And so wanting to read it because of my insatiable curiousity I am.
Near the middle of the chapter I could have sworn that narrowing of the eyes from Sesshoumaru was him being suspicious of Jaken and what he might be up to next. -snickers- If I had been thier I would have sat back on my haunches and made an undignified umph. Thinking he was dead meat. Then "The half breed" caught me.
-grins and leans back- I think you protrayed the green toad well. Sometimes a short chapter is a needed one. Oh a really good motivator is walking around a place you don't know or a park. Another one is talking to a complete stranger. Random I know -shrugs- but it works ^-^
Lyss (Chapter 2) - Thu 16 Feb 2012
I don't believe you're making Jaken OOC... I think it's something he'd probably do to be helpful lol xD i'm intrigued on where you are going to go with this and I'm enjoying it so far! :) Thanks for writing! :)
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