First let me say that I simply love your story so far. I feel SLIGHTLY bad for Inuyasha but it's fault for 1 not telling her sooner and 2 not being honest and taking her as his rightful mate. Had he done so maybe things wouldn't have turned out that way but who am I kidding? I love Sesshoumaru and Kagome so why would I want Inuyasha and her to be together or fix their relationship?
The main reason of this review though is because I have noticed ( and no doubt other too) that you tend to be repetitive with your phases and paragraphs and I am just trying to help when I say you might want to watch out for that in this fanfiction as well as other you may be writing at the moment. Other than that keep up the good work and hope to see great things from you!
Bad Yasha! But then again atleast she is considering Sesshoumaru now ^^
lara (Chapter 23) - Fri 21 Jan 2011
This is not the first time I read this story & loved it as much as I did the first time although I feel as though this version is exactly the same I could very well be wrong as I read it quite a while ago
Already love it! Can't wait to read the rest~ ^^'
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