I really enjoy reading this story but I think that there were a few places where I dind't quite understand the meaning. The puntuation and spelling needs to be worked on a little bit to show off this stories full potential. As it is, it is still a great read.

This is a really great, wonderful, good story, and i love and like this story since i first started reading it, your a very great, good, wonderful author who wrote this wonderful, good, great story!

OMG! Awesome and amazing story!! LOVED IT!! too bad u ended it.... oh well!! :)

Your grammar could use a bit of work, and your spelling as well. Overall, the story is unique, but the structure of it is rather confusing. the word is spelled sense, not sens, and it's traitor, not trader.

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