Ooo, great beginning.  There's a lot going on here with Naraku and his weirdness - why is he so obsessed with her?  And why is Sesshomaru helping her?  Curiosity is getting the better of the dog!

I look forward to seeing the plot develop.

Wowww what a start, what a start. I found it impressive that you created Kagome more powerful because of Kikyou's soul. And it makes sense for Naraku's human heart to crave for Kagome even more now. Kagome is now a living version of Kikyou...so what is stopping for Naraku not to,,,right? I thought you did a wonderful job explaining that unqiue portion.

As for Kagome and Sesshomaru~ I found their chemistry interesting even in the first chappie! That is a great sign! It is understandable for Sesshomaru to protect Kagome in risk of handing over her powers to Naraku...and Kagome would obviously stick with Naraku. Now...I fear she's been a little bit traumatized. Poor Kagome. Definitely got me hooked to read more ^0^

*pats back* well written and structured as well!