You should put there more descriptions and stuff..you´re running too fast in the storyline..but keep working, it will be better:)
Oh yeah... and not so much "sugar", please...I can hardly imagine Kagome saying "You’re really sweet Sesshomaru!" and things like that...and what about behavior of Sesshoumaru? ...I hope this can help you:)
good luck:)
________________________ (Chapter 1) - Thu 28 Oct 2010
WHO EVERY MADE THIS STORY NEEDS TO MAKE MORE CHATERS LIKE SERIOUSLY I WANT MORE
this is great Kagome-chan, keep up the good work
update soon
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